Better Business Letters: A Practical Desk Manual
A pocket desk manual from 1921, one of three "Better Business Books" published by Frederick J. Drake of Chicago, written by John M. Manly, head of English at the University of Chicago, and John A. Powell of the Holtzer-Cabot Electric Company.
What it is
A pocket desk manual from 1921, one of three "Better Business Books" published by Frederick J. Drake of Chicago, written by John M. Manly, head of English at the University of Chicago, and John A. Powell of the Holtzer-Cabot Electric Company. Its one idea is that a business letter is a sales talk in writing. Chapter I asks for knowledge of the goods, knowledge of the prospect and a plan; it bans vague superlatives and puts "you" ahead of "we". Chapter II gives a four-part frame: an opening that gets attention, description, argument and persuasion, and a "clincher" close. Chapter III lists futile phrases such as "beg to advise", "as per" and "contents noted". Later chapters cover follow-up letters, collection letters as a graduated series from reminder to legal threat, complaint replies, and Dr. Frank Crane's "Ten Commandments of Salesmanship", each with sample letters.
Why read it now
Most of its rules still hold because they are about the reader, not the format. Put the customer's interest first, replace superlatives with specific facts, and write as you would talk: later work on plain language and on claim credibility agrees that specific, readable claims are believed more than general ones. Two practices read as current: study the replies you got before writing the follow-up, which is testing without the word, and plan collection letters as an escalating sequence, which is how dunning emails are built today. What has dated: the letterhead mechanics (reference lines, stenographer initials), the assumption that every reader and writer is a man, and the "Do it now" closing formulas. Its expected response of 5 to 10 per cent is far above what cold email earns now. The rules come from experience, with no test results shown. Use: take its futile-phrases list and build the Arabic version for your team's templates, cutting stock openings like "نفيدكم علمًا" and "مرفق طيه", then rewrite each WhatsApp and email template so the first line is about the customer.
Passages worth keeping
The one thing above all others that the book seeks to emphasize is that business letters should be business talks in writing, with the "human" element predominating.
الرسالة التجارية في نظر المؤلفين حديث مكتوب يغلب عليه الطابع الإنساني، لا وثيقة رسمية جامدة.
A business letter should be regarded as substantially a business conversation reduced to writing.
اكتب الرسالة كما لو كنت تحاور العميل وجهًا لوجه، مع قدر أكبر من الإيجاز والترتيب.
You hand your correspondent nothing by means of a letter. And if you "beg," you most certainly won't sell, or even be accorded the right to treat with him as an equal.
عبارات التذلل الجاهزة في المراسلات لا تعبر عن الواقع، وتضع الكاتب في موقع أدنى من العميل فيخسر البيع.
We know prices are low, BUT HAVE YOU SEEN OURS?
رسالة من سطر واحد غرضها أن يطلب القارئ قائمة الأسعار، فتكشف من هو العميل المهتم فعلًا قبل إرسال رسالة البيع الكاملة.
It is well to remember that customers have a long memory and a tongue, as well.
العميل الغاضب يتذكر طويلًا ويتحدث إلى غيره، فطريقة الرد على شكواه تصنع سمعة الشركة أو تهدمها.
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